Recently in Korea, lots of people are rushing into the stock market, and it seems quite different from the past stock craze. In the old days, people thought investing in the stock market is like a gamble, for example, If you succeed, you can get tons of money but you can blow your whole life If you fail. But nowadays, due to the low interest rate and the flood of information commencing SNS and Youtube, people have changed their minds that it is worth trying to get into a stock market. Contrary to their perception, most of them are purchasing stocks just like before, buying and selling without any reason. But If you have your own basis with your market viewing, you can improve your profit. For example, I set my basis of investment as hitting of a baseball. I think there are some similar points with stock trading and hitting of a baseball. You need to wait until the good chance towards me, should not play without plans and thoughts, and have to use the power that you weren’t thinking of.   

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